Messages in this thread | | | Date | Tue, 26 Jan 1999 09:54:29 -0500 (EST) | From | Chris Ricker <> | Subject | Re: ** Fork 1, Draft Final-6 ** |
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On Mon, 25 Jan 1999, Kyle R. Rose wrote:
> Okay, here's the latest draft. There are some substantial revisions > regarding the UNIX problem, which I think Albert Cahalan has solved for > us. I also trimmed the URLs quite a bit, so I'm sorry if I took out > something you might consider important, but it had to be done. (The > survey results were QUITE clear on that point.)
I'd change it back to the full Microsoft quote. Ellipses in a quote from a competitor that makes you sound good are always suspicious.
Besides, it's a quote. Trademark violation issues shouldn't apply.
> * Compatibility with Windows NT and BSD filesystems enables Linux 2.2 to > seamlessly handle data from legacy systems. With SAMBA, a Linux system > can transparently replace all NT Server functions, including file- and > print-sharing and domain authentication.
Change SAMBA to Samba. Also, I liked it better with NT instead of Windows NT, so you could attribute the TM to Northern Telecom.
> Linux 2.2 is available for free download via the Internet. For a list of > the "mirror servers" established in anticipation of the massive demand for > this new release, visit the Linux Kernel Archive (http://www.kernel.org/). > As always, the Linux kernel is distributed as Free Software under the terms > of the GNU General Public License (http://www.fsf.org/copyleft/gpl.html).
Loose the sentence about where to get it.
> Linux distribution vendors are expected to ship fully-integrated systems > using the new kernel before Q2 1999. Business users should look to their > distribution vendors for information about this important upgrade. > > ABOUT LINUX > > "Linux" is the common name for a class of secure network operating systems
I'd loose the "class of". It's confusing to idiots, and that's who press releases are for....
> based on the Linux kernel and other open source software including the Free > Software Foundation's GNU Project, the Apache web server, Samba, the X > Window System, and portions of BSD. Linux takes full advantage of modern, > high-end x86, Power Mac, Alpha, and UltraSPARC hardware. It can also
This needs changing to something like " high-end Intel, Apple, Digital Alpha, and Sun UltraSPARC hardware". People don't know what x86 or IA32 stand for.
> Microsoft employees Josh Cohen and Vinod Valloppillil, in a competitive > examination of Linux (The so-called "Halloween Document", > http://www.opensource.org/halloween.html), wrote that "Linux. . .is trusted > on mission critical applications, and - due to its open source code - has a > long term credibility which exceeds many other competitive operating > systems."
The best-of-breed part was the best part of the quote. If you have to use ellipses, just omit the UNIX. Best-of-breed can be a noun as well as an adjective.
later, chris
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